Hi Brodie,

Thank you for your manuscript.

I have read through the materials and I would like to suggest that the following points could be added, if you want.

1. An introduction to each section.

2. Short paragraphs on the life and work of the author.

3. Can the author provide the reader with possible practical solutions to make life more positive.

4. The points raised by the author are very relevant in society today.

5. Provide a few photographs or illustrations to show injustices in society today.

6. Include quotes and phrases on our changing world and why the world needs to change.

7. Footnotes in sections, that can help the reader to understand "the whole picture".

8. Break the manuscript into chapters, to make it more convenient for the reader to read.

9. Highlight sections. that are important and which the reader needs to pay extra attention.

10. A concluding chapter can be added at the end of the book.

I hope that these points are helpful. You have done a lot of hard work in getting this manuscript together.

Wishing you well in your literary endeavours.

Regards

Warren